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he was a hoary man
one whose hair was a slicked
field of black tobacco with
thick rows of skin between the herbs

he was a generous man
one whose lenient vivacity for life
had cost him a forefinger
and half of his right ear,
though he could still pull back the rake

he was a quiet man
one whose yellow-toothed grins
were found on the floor after sales
but had been discovered and used as fertilizer
with the rest of the garbage

he was a misconstrued man
one whose farm was sold to his neighbor
who bulldozed it
and built a gas station.
©2008-2009 ~San-Tropez
:iconsan-tropez:

Author's Comments

The first poem I've ever written that I don't hate.

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:iconpirat3muffin:
reminds me of something out of In His Own Write. :XD:

I like the part with the grins who were never discovered with the garbage. nice.
:iconkimikotsu:
I love the flow of it! :clap:

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"Well, bells ring and clocks will chime
Carefully keeping time
I’d rather measure mine
By your heart"~ The Old Ceremony
:iconsan-tropez:
Thanks! :)

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P S Y C H E D E L I C A T E S S E N
:iconsan-tropez:
Thank you! At first, I was afraid that it wouldn't flow as well in other people's heads as well as it does in mine, but it's good to know that it does; at least for you. :D

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P S Y C H E D E L I C A T E S S E N
:iconspiderwebwings:
:( ohhhhh poor old man. This is a very lovely poem.

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*shrug* so shoot me....
:boing:
:iconnae-kaizer:
Han vasker rutene på rødt lys~
og når det blir grønt kan han ta seg et mys~

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I'm a Censor in the deviantART Psychonauts Crew!
:iconkimikotsu:
Not a problem :)

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"Well, bells ring and clocks will chime
Carefully keeping time
I’d rather measure mine
By your heart"~ The Old Ceremony
:iconsan-tropez:
Men han kan ikkje sjå ut i frå vindu
har ingen vindu han kan sjå ut ifrå~

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P S Y C H E D E L I C A T E S S E N
:iconsan-tropez:
Thanks :)

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P S Y C H E D E L I C A T E S S E N

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